Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion

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think that giving young to take their decision on daily affairs is likely to be people who give priority to themselves, others argue that it is essential for them to make personal choices about
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personal life. In
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select their everyday needs
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to be more selfish who only think about themselves because when they are doing their own task they will only learn to do for themselves.
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and taking care only for themself since
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involve taking decision only one person. They do not get any opportunity to share information, food and things of their use.
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not learn how to share, respect and care
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people since they have been taught to be
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become more
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think
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, in my opinion, it is necessary to teach them to manage
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personal decisions.
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habit will teach them to think critically
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someone or something is.
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to that when growing up managing
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force them to understand the value of feeling and emotions.
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same thing applies with these animals or others too. In
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believe,
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it
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a strong caring personality who
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can understand the value of others life and emotions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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