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‘The Internet will never replace traditional course books in schools.’ How far do you agree with this prediction?

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One fact which I believe to be absolutely pivotal is the fact that with the advancement of technology the
internet
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 is becoming essential
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 every aspect.
Scholars
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 are finding digital learning convenient and a vital source of
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.
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 over the
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, I completely agree with the above statement that traditional
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 will never be replaced by the
internet
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. On the one hand, course
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 whether conventional or digital are designed by experts which
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 incorporated with the subject syllabus and leading to testing procedures
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 as, internal assessments, formal examination, etcetera.
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, they are proven to enhance
scholars
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 academic performance and increase their potential for the progression to higher studies. To exemplify, a hard copy of the classic book ' The four P's of
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 is still recommended for business studies students despite abundant
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 available on the
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Therefore
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,traditional
books
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 will always remain a necessary part of
scholars
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 curriculum.
On the other hand
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, the
internet
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 can play a useful part to excel
scholars
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 knowledge as it provides access to
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vast range of
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.
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, it makes lessons less teacher lead and more autonomous learning.
This
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 will teach children more self-learning compared to the old rote-learning procedures.
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, distance learning is one of its examples.
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, it should be used under the supervision of
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 as children do not have
skills
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 to discriminate between source and sift
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 to marshal their facts. To conclude,
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 the
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 is
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 vital source of
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,
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children should use it as a guided-learning process
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 as an exercise of data gathering.
Nevertheless
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, the material and quality of the course
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 always remain
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an integral part of their syllabus. The
internet
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 can be judged a useful supplement to
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 if used carefully and under supervision.
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