Some people believe schoolchildren should help to create rules in their schools. Others say teachers alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it has been a controversial topic whether
students
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should be involved in determining the
school
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's regulation, or it should be created by only
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. In
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, which I absolutely support that
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should be responsible for setting the
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's
rule
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. On the one hand, the reason why
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a teacher
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teacher
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should solely decide the legislation is that they have
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perspective compared to
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. and know what are advantages and disadvantages for
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do not know the adverse consequences of not attending the class, which they just enjoy the day with their friends.
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,
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have passed
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education is important for future careers.
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,
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are able to set the rules that will be
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for
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teachers
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have the perspective of adults, which have experienced the study life before, there are some problems that only
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will know
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as bully and
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in schools. From my experience as always being bullied, I cannot tell anyone about
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even
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or parents so
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cannot help anything excepting there
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a rule for preventing
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, if
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are being involved in making the
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's
regislation
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legislation
,
these problem
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will be solved directly. In conclusion, in
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to properly managing
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, which
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for everyone,
students
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have to be a part of setting
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because they know the exact problems
occuring
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occurring
in schools that some troubles are not known by adults.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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