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You have not seen a close friend for a very long time. You also still have a few of your friend’s belongings that were left at your house the last time she visited. In your letter include: - Why you are writing - What you’ve been doing since you last spoke together - Apologize for still having the items and ask how you can return them Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Maria, How are you doing? It's been a long
time
 since we met. Well, I am writing to remind you about your personal items which you left at my house. Two months back, you visited me and you were in
rush
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a rush
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. At that
time
, you forgot your black shirt,
wrist watch
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wristwatch
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 and a bottle of perfume. Unfortunately,
due to
 my busy
schedule
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schedule,
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 I forgot to remind you earlier. Since you left, I
was
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have been
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 busy with my job as my
work load
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workload
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 has increased a lot. Apart from that, do you remember my brother? He got married
last
 month! So I was
also
 busy with wedding arrangements.
Finally
, after two long
months
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months,
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 I have some
time
 for myself. I know these items must have been important for you so I really apologize for not reminding you. How should I return these items? Please let me know at your own
time
 and we can arrange things
accordingly
. Best wishes, Tirth T
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Enhance Engagement
Consider adding more detail about how you've felt during the time apart or any specific occurrences that made you think of your friend. This could strengthen the personal connection in your letter.
Strengthen Relationship
Explore the possibility of suggesting a meet-up when returning the items to add a warmth to the gesture and reinforce your friendship.
Structure
You effectively structured your letter with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
Tone
Your writing tone is appropriate for a letter to a close friend, maintaining a balance between formality and personal warmth.
Consideration
By apologizing for the oversight and asking how to return the items, you've shown consideration and respect for your friend's feelings.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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