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Band 4.5

Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience.

Eversince
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Ever since
 globalisation came into
limelight
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, the world
become
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 a global village. A large deduction in
air
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 flight tickets
have
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 been seen the recent years.
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with
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into
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 the pros and cons of change in airfares. To embark with advantages,
air
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travel
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 is now affordable and economical in comparison to
last
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 decade.
People
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 who
belongs
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 to
middle-class
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the middle-class
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 area of society can afford to
travel
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 overseas to meet their kith and kins. To illustrate , earlier, the relatives who lived abroad visited their friends and family in
home
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their home
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country
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 after several years due to high airfares .
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, now they visit frequently in
short
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a short
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 span of time.
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,
decline
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the decline
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 in
air
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 tickets proved
as
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to
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 a
boom
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boon
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 for tourism. Tourism is flourishing
day
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 by
day
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. It is not only given
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to travellers to explore
the
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apply
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foreign places but
also
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 adds up to the revenue of the tourist
country
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.
Traveller
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Travellers
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 get cheaper tour packages with cheaper flights.
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, as commuting
get
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 easier and masses can
travel
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 from one
country
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 to
other
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another country
other countries
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country
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 within their budget. It leads to
spread
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the spread
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 of fatal
disease
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diseases
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.
Health
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The health
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 of
people
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 is at stake. Different kind of viruses which have
tendency
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a tendency
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 to multiply and are challenging to combat. To epitome , the coronavirus is a good illustration of it, it spreads all across the globe due to
air
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travel
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.
Consequently
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, it leads to
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 which puts the
day
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 to
day
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 life of
people
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 on
halt
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a halt
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. On top of that, more
people
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 travelling means more flights are reserved and frequent
air
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 trips are arranged, which are directly lead to higher consumption of natural resources like fuel and
increase
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an increase
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 in pollution. All surge in carbon dioxide in
environment
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the environment
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 has been noted in recent years. To recapitulate, as every coin has two Side, reduced airfares
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 has pros and cons. All we need is a balanced, logical and rational approach.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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