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The first man to walk on the moon said space exploration was going to change mankind’s life. Some people argue that it made only a little change to our lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Space
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 travels have been undertaken numerous times over the decades despite its huge cost. It is arguable whether exploring
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 is worthwhile to make our
lives
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 any different. I believe that
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 has countless positive impacts on human activities. On the one hand, there is a main possible reason that could make people think that
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 voyage is useless. The reason is the presence of imperative problems
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 as poverty. For those living in poor countries, benefits from the exploration of
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 would not be beneficial. Rather, access to clean water and sufficient food would be what they actually need.
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, expanding the opportunities for education in
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 poor regions would be a more urgent issue for the government to tackle.
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, some people who consider the poor might the faith that
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 to
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 is not as important as other issues.
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, there are actually plenty of advantages of investing money in
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 travel. In fact, many technological inventions which we currently have are by-products of advanced technologies used for
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 travel.
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, wireless headphones were
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 invented by NASA, the organisation of managing
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 projects, for better communication between colleagues in a
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 shuttle.
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, the material of form memory beds used in hospitals was
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 produced for astronauts to reduce their risk of injuries in case of an accident in
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. These adaptations of novel
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 technologies to our daily
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 are everywhere and
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,
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 voyages can help develop scientific development, thereby making our
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 more convenient. In summary,
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 usage of advanced
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 technologies in our
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 might not be pronounced, they are ubiquitous and largely contributing to our daily activities.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • transformative
  • technological development
  • inspiration
  • practical applications
  • satellite communications
  • GPS technology
  • medical devices
  • earthly problems
  • environmental conservation
  • tangible benefits
  • international collaboration
  • scientific progress
  • long-term benefits
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