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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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"Meeting international
exchange
 is boon for
school
 student",
this
 saying is from some educationalist's notion. International
exchange
 offers teenagers
the
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several benefits
such
 as
practicing
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 languages, providing opportunities, and changing their
culture
.
To begin
 with,
the
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opportunities are offered for some
students
 whose
family
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families
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 can not efforts them
intuition
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in tuition
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 fees to study
aboard
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abroad
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. In fact,
oversea
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 study
require
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 several options, which are
school
 grade, proficiency test, and family's bank statement. It creates privileges. If
school
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the school
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 had the internal
exchange
 visit, the
students
 would receive more chances in order to learn
language
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 and
culture
. Having
international
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exchange
 program for
students
 is magnificent. Interestingly, it is fabulous for teens to make a relationship with
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friend
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 from
oversea
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. Based on my own experiences, I had received an opportunity from the
school
 to spend
times
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 and do activities with the guests from Bhutan and Singapore. Obviously, my English was advanced in a few days because I utilize English for the whole day talking about extraordinary topics, more than speaking in front of the class.
In addition
, I was more familiar with the different accents. Not only language
skill
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that is
 improved, but
culture
 is
also
 shared. The teenagers will comprehend the varieties of
culture
 in the real world, not only from their classroom's lessons, which are sometimes ironic.
For instance
, western news presents that Thai
students
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elephant
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 to
school
, so it leads
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. Visiting Thailand makes them know that we do not.
Consequently
, we learn to live peacefully regardless of religion and nationality as well. To summarize, there are more pros
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 meeting
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exchange
 than its cons. Significantly, opportunities in terms of improving languages and
culture
 exchanging are
also
 learnt out of their classes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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