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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home . Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from the home for the company. And give your own opinion

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Some organizations have given their
employees
 the chance to
work
 from their place .I strongly believe that
this
 system of working is beneficial to the
company
.
This
 essay will elaborate
the
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 advantages in the
first
 half and
second
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 half will discuss
about
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the demerits.
Firstly
this
approach
 can save travelling
time
 of the employee which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
. If the travelling
time
 of the employee
is save
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,
this
time
 can be utilised in the
work
 for the maximum output.
moreover
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employees
 can
work
 in odd hours
also
 as per their
convience
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convenience
. Some
time
employees
 take leave for their personal issues but through
this
approach
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 personnel can extend their hours of
work
in
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 other days and finish their
work
.
Thus
 companies revenue will increase Apart from
this
 operational cost of the companies will be reduced .due to
work
 from home ,rental
expenses
 ,
maintainence
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maintenance
expenses
,
electrcity
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electricity
expenses
 will be cut down which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
moreover
 highly skilled staff can be recruited anywhere from the world .
for example
 if a
company
 recruits any staff from outside their country ,
organization
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 has to pay his travelling cost, living cost ,
family
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 allowance which will affect the profitability of the
company
On the
contrary
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 many people will not be able to focus on their performance as they follow casual
work
approach
 and distracted by their family members.they don't get the assigned task
effieciently
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efficiently
 which cause
negative
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 impact on the
company
 reputation and productivity,
also
 at the workplace
employees
 can share and discuss the innovative ideas but due to online
work
 physical connection is
getitng
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getting
 less , through
this
 discussion quality of
work
 will improve.ultimately it hampers the productivity of the organisation To conclude if
productivity
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the productivity
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 of the
company
 is flourished by saving operational
expenses
, travelling
time
 and reputed staff but on the other side due to the casual
approach
 of workers it
also
 has demerits
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