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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home . Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from the home for the company. And give your own opinion

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Some organizations have given their
employees
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 the chance to
work
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 from their place .I strongly believe that
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 system of working is beneficial to the
company
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.
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 essay will elaborate
the
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 advantages in the
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 half and
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second
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 half will discuss
about
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the demerits.
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this
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approach
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 can save travelling
time
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 of the employee which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
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. If the travelling
time
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 of the employee
is save
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,
this
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time
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 can be utilised in the
work
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 for the maximum output.
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moreover
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employees
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 can
work
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 in odd hours
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 as per their
convience
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convenience
. Some
time
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employees
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 take leave for their personal issues but through
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approach
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 personnel can extend their hours of
work
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in
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 other days and finish their
work
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 companies revenue will increase Apart from
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 operational cost of the companies will be reduced .due to
work
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 from home ,rental
expenses
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 ,
maintainence
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maintenance
expenses
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,
electrcity
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electricity
expenses
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 will be cut down which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
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 highly skilled staff can be recruited anywhere from the world .
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 if a
company
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 recruits any staff from outside their country ,
organization
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the organization
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 has to pay his travelling cost, living cost ,
family
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 allowance which will affect the profitability of the
company
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contrary
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 many people will not be able to focus on their performance as they follow casual
work
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approach
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 and distracted by their family members.they don't get the assigned task
effieciently
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efficiently
 which cause
negative
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a negative
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 impact on the
company
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 reputation and productivity,
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 at the workplace
employees
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 can share and discuss the innovative ideas but due to online
work
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 physical connection is
getitng
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getting
 less , through
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 discussion quality of
work
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 will improve.ultimately it hampers the productivity of the organisation To conclude if
productivity
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the productivity
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 of the
company
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 is flourished by saving operational
expenses
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, travelling
time
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 and reputed staff but on the other side due to the casual
approach
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 of workers it
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 has demerits
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