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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home . Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of work from home to the company and give your own opinion

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Some organizations have given their
employees
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 the chance to
work
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 from their place .I strongly believe that
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 system of working is beneficial to the
company
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.
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 essay will elaborate on the merits and demerits of
work
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 from home.
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 of all
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this
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approach
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 can save the travelling
time
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 of the employee which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
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. If the travelling
time
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 of the employee is saved ,
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time
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 can be utilised in the
work
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 for the maximum output,
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moreover
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employees
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 can
work
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 in odd hours
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 as per their convenience . Some
time
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employees
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 take leave for their personal issues but through
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approach
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 , personnel can extend their hours of
work
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 on other days and finish their
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.
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 companies revenue will increase Apart from
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 operational cost of the companies will be reduced .due to
work
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 from home ,rental expenses ,electricity expenses will be cut down which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
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moreover
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 highly skilled staff can be recruited anywhere from the world .
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 if a
company
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 recruits any staff from outside their country ,the organization has to pay his travelling cost which will affect the profitability of the
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many people will not be able to focus on their performance as they follow a casual
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approach
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 and are distracted by their family members.they do not get the assigned task efficiently which cause a negative impact on the
company
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 reputation and productivity,
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 at the workplace
employees
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 can share and discuss the innovative ideas but due to online
work
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 physical connection is getting less , through
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 discussion quality of
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 will improve. To conclude if the productivity of a
company
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 is flourished by saving operational expenses, travelling
time
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 and recruiting reputed staff but on the other side due to the casual
approach
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 of workers it
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 has demerits of
work
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 from home.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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