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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home . Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of work from home to the company and give your own opinion

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Some organizations have given their
employees
 the chance to
work
 from their place .I strongly believe that
this
 system of working is beneficial to the
company
.
This
 essay will elaborate on the merits and demerits of
work
 from home.
First
 of all
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this
approach
 can save the travelling
time
 of the employee which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
. If the travelling
time
 of the employee is saved ,
this
time
 can be utilised in the
work
 for the maximum output,
moreover
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employees
 can
work
 in odd hours
also
 as per their convenience . Some
time
employees
 take leave for their personal issues but through
this
approach
 , personnel can extend their hours of
work
 on other days and finish their
work
.
Thus
 companies revenue will increase Apart from
this
 operational cost of the companies will be reduced .due to
work
 from home ,rental expenses ,electricity expenses will be cut down which is ultimately beneficial for the
company
moreover
 highly skilled staff can be recruited anywhere from the world .
for example
 if a
company
 recruits any staff from outside their country ,the organization has to pay his travelling cost which will affect the profitability of the
company
On the other hand
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many people will not be able to focus on their performance as they follow a casual
work
approach
 and are distracted by their family members.they do not get the assigned task efficiently which cause a negative impact on the
company
 reputation and productivity,
also
 at the workplace
employees
 can share and discuss the innovative ideas but due to online
work
 physical connection is getting less , through
this
 discussion quality of
work
 will improve. To conclude if the productivity of a
company
 is flourished by saving operational expenses, travelling
time
 and recruiting reputed staff but on the other side due to the casual
approach
 of workers it
also
 has demerits of
work
 from home.
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