In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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argument given to support my opinion is that there is a great evolution of many aspects of society. People are gradually aware of the benefits of eating
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. We should follow some nutrition experts advice that eats more
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and reduces meats that provide more nutritious for our health .
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, most of us want to have good looking with
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slim body that the reason why people like to eat
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and fruits than meat. In manufacturing, advanced technology
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us to produce many goods
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as clothes, shoes, medicines and so on without using
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from
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. We can use natural
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like wool or man-made
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like cotton, silicon and so on. Another reason for using other
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which are
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for
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that to protect the environment and help
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. In conclusion, I entirely agree that there is no need of using
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for food or other products. We completely can use
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like
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or many other
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to alter
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in the manufacture and consume food.
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