Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been proved that poverty is a problem that isn't easily solved specifically by
money
. The financial
aids
provided by the solvents of the world often does little to actually help the poor
countries
because
that is
not the only requirement for them.
This
essay will discuss why
money
is doing little to help and the necessity of
education
to actually improve the livelihoods of poor
countries
. While the
countries
are disbursing help in the form of direct financial
aids
for the poor
countries
, they are not actually reaching the
people
who need them because of corruption. The poorer
countries
are generally riddled with corruption by the politicians and the
people
in the power and ,
unfortunately
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they are the ones directing how the
aids
are going to be distributed.
For example
: Bangladesh receives over 100 million dollars in help in each natural disaster but the surveys showed only 20-30% of affected
people
actually get them.
Therefore
if we want to make sure that the help is actually reaching the
people
, we have to make sure there isn't any corruption during the disbursements and to be completely honest, I don't think
that is
a viable thing to do in the current geopolitical context. So, it is a good time to ask, if we are not able to correctly deliver the financial
aids
, what alternatives we might have? And the answer lies in ensuring the proper
education
for the poor
countries
.
Education
is one of the key areas where poor
countries
are well behind the rest of the world and it is the most important area using which they can improve their lives. During recent ,studies it has been proven that despite having a poor family background, almost 80% of
people
can live a better life if they are well educated.
Education
can open so many doors for the
people
and it certainly can elevate a
countries
status on the global stage which is the reason I think
besides
giving
money
, other
countries
should
also
invest heavily in the
education
sectors of underdeveloped
countries
. From the above ,essay we can have a clear picture of how financial
aids
are being misdirected and
also
can get an overview of how
education
can be a complementary solution to
this
problem. I strongly believe if we help to construct the backbone of a country which is
education
, it can have a way more positive impact than simply using
money
to mask the problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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