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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organistions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Should I work for the same company for my entire working
life
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 or should I work for different ones?
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workers’
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. Both
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 have their own benefits.
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, the decision should be carefully made because each
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 have its own cost. Being in the same company has various advantages.
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, employees don’t need to adapt to
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 environment, due to their familiarity with colleagues and working processes. So, they can save their time and energies for excelling
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, employees have more time to present their abilities to their supervisors, so that workers could have more chances to get promoted. Even though staying in the same place can bring stability in
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 both financially and mentally,
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 could bring boredom to workers.
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, working in different companies can bring many opportunities. Not only the opportunity of boosting their salaries up
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 but
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 being able to learn new things and new processes which workers haven’t known before.
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, the best results of work can be delivered by the one who
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 worked for different organizations, because they have seen a variety of
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 to solve problems.
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, at some point in
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, humans normally need their
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 to be steady.
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, the idea of changing
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 might not be in their minds anymore. There are many advantages
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 both
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 of decisions. I feel that it depends on the workers’
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 situation at that time.
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, I recommend younger employees should explore
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more experiences through various organizations to be able to make good decisions in their
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