Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organistions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Should I work for the same company for my entire working
life
or should I work for different ones?
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workers’
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. Both
ways
have their own benefits.
However
, the decision should be carefully made because each
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have its own cost. Being in the same company has various advantages.
Firstly
, employees don’t need to adapt to
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environment, due to their familiarity with colleagues and working processes. So, they can save their time and energies for excelling
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own tasks.
Secondly
, employees have more time to present their abilities to their supervisors, so that workers could have more chances to get promoted. Even though staying in the same place can bring stability in
life
both financially and mentally,
this
could bring boredom to workers.
In contrast
, working in different companies can bring many opportunities. Not only the opportunity of boosting their salaries up
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but
also
being able to learn new things and new processes which workers haven’t known before.
Moreover
, the best results of work can be delivered by the one who
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worked for different organizations, because they have seen a variety of
ways
to solve problems.
Nevertheless
, at some point in
life
, humans normally need their
life
to be steady.
Hence
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both
ways
of decisions. I feel that it depends on the workers’
life
situation at that time.
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more experiences through various organizations to be able to make good decisions in their
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