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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel and work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Countries
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 benefits from diverse sources of
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, nuclear
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is
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 the most controversial one. Nuclear
energy
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 has distinctive features, it affects the domestic economy of
countries
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 and international relations.
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 type of
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 has disadvantaged backgrounds. The nuclear bomb is a deadly weapon that uses nuclear
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. It releases large quantities of
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 from small amounts of matter.
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 weapon brings a detailed consideration among all governments that leads to making difficult decisions about eligible
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. Obtaining nuclear
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 makes
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 be a dominant
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 in political relations. There are distinct
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pieces of evidence
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 about the effect of
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the abusage
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 of nuclear
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 and its dramatic changes on lives and
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the environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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