In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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it is believed that governments force

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a friend of mine has reached 200 kg. , he continues to eat hamburgers every day from the same restaurant and does not mind the price. If our government were forced the restaurants to bring some sales limit, he would not

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, others think that governments should arrange the tax level of these products. Because

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there are many economic problems in many countries and everybody chooses their meals within their budget. Nobody wants to pay more when they can reach reasonable

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and these transactions can decrease the consumption of fast

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. The most important point to support my idea is, my mother always purchasing our meals considering the

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
obesity
diabetes
heart disease
health outcomes
healthcare costs
consumer behavior
socio-economic backgrounds
ethical implications
public health campaigns
subsidies
regulations
nutritional content
healthier food options
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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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