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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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this
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 era, more
information
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 is available everywhere;
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, it is widely believed that some essential
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such
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scientific
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as scientific
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research
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 should not
freely
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be freely
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published
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 due to funding. Meanwhile, the contrary view is that it will be better to access those without payment. I strongly believe those should be sold for investment
further
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research
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. As students are willing to gain more knowledge, they prefer to read more
research
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 papers on the internet in the present. Generally,
those
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that information
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information
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 will provide
fundemental
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fundamental
 elements which are useful for some subjects in universities.
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, most students must read the articles before doing the assignments, while some of them are required to pay before accessing the whole text.
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self-esteem
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 of university students because they can afford
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those journals and articles.
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, scientists should be subsidised on their
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. According to the main requirement of conducting the
research
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 is
financial
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a financial
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 investment, the published papers should be received the income.
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, to complete
a
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research
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 on a novel
medicince
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medicine
medicines
, researchers have been paying
on
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for
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the
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apply
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raw materials, testing equipment and other involving items
who
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 are extremely expensive.
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 does not include the salary of the staff yet.
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,
cost
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the cost
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 of published articles should be considered
as
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reasonable. To conclude, I personally think the
information
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 in
term
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 of science, business and the academic world should not be published freely due to the benefits on scientists and
further
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research
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although
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 some
student
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students
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are
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is
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 not able to access those.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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