Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

People have widely differing views with regard to the question of whether the rising trend of communicating via technological devices come at the expense of face to face communication. From my perspective,
although
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trend has some obvious benefits, I would argue that there are more drawbacks. On the
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one hand, no sensible person could deny that mobile phones,
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and technological devices, in general, has
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promoted and facilitated our means of communication, bridging the gap between people. These devices can come in handy when you are in distress. A case in point is that children can call their parents when
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unfortunate events happen, or even in school attacks. Mobile phones are expected to perform as
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social tool with its mass production,
On the other hand
, we could not disregard the negative aspects of
this
trend. There are multiple
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that people have been reduced to interacting on social platforms. There is nothing expressly wrong with chatting with friends, but it is indeed a major issue if it is done at the cost of interpersonal relationships. Phubbing has become so rampant in recent years that it has hindered real human interaction and taken you away from
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activities. Human beings are social creatures by nature,
this
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, as technology become rife, in some ways, while we have closed a gap that physical distance once created
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created a new gap fostering ourselves and the ones physically closest to us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interact
  • technology
  • relationship
  • connectivity
  • virtual
  • communication skills
  • dependency
  • access
  • information
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
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