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Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for student’s home country. What extent do you agree or disagree.

#student’s #home #country
Studying abroad is always a dream of many students because it brings tremendous benefits. In order to
living
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this
 dream students are working
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heard
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. There are some
people
 who believe that
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study
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a study
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 in
foreign
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the foreign
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 county has
lot
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 of advantages, while other
people
 argue that,
this
 trend still
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 some drawbacks. In
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 I will examine both sides and provide my opinion. Generally speaking, there are
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 of reasons why
people
 believe that
,
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 students get better opportunities if they
study
 in foreign universities or colleges. Perhaps the main reason why
people
 favour of
study
 in abroad
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 they can enrol In Prestigious
university
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 while studying
in
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abroad. When they educated themselves in famous educational institutions that
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 their qualifications . It helps them find decent jobs and
also
 improves their lifestyle.
Secondly
, pupils can learn foreign languages and cultures which increases their adaptation quality. It
also
 assists them
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 their thoughts and
also
 gain their trust in
foreign
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 land.
On the other hand
, everything comes with some disadvantages.
Firstly
, drain out knowledge to other nations. Because foreign countries offer them better
salary
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 and opportunities
unlike
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 their own country.
This
 is the reason why they
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 to back their homeland.
Furthermore
, it can be challenging living away from home. They need to do all work alone like, household chores, finding accommodation.
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 they have to do work for their livelihood which make them exhausted. To sum up, every coin
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 two sides. In my opinion
study
 in foreign university enlarge our capabilities and
also
 broaden our horizon.
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achieve
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 something big we have to face some problems that make us more strong.
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