Some people prefer to directly help or support people in need in the local community. However, others choose to give money to the national or international organizations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays there are several ways to help
people
around the world,
donation
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is one of them. There are some
people
who choose to help
people
personally or through local communities, while others like to assist the needy
people
to the national or international
organisations
. I
this
passage I will try to explain both notions and
also
give my opinion. Generally speaking, there are ample
of
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reasons why
people
chose to donate their valuable
money
to
the
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non
profitable
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organisations
. Perhaps the main reason is that why
people
favour
this
is that, the NGOs charity-table trusts or other helping institutions because they are professional and have up to date information about helpless
people
.
Moreover
, they can provide help effectively compare to local communities or individuals. For an instance,
bidha
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bid
nondon
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London
is a nonprofit organisation in Bangladesh, every year they received national and international aid from various countries the reason is that they work executively as well as they are very transparent.
Furthermore
, donators donate
money
to helping
people
’s
specially
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in
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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and developing countries to assist get out
from
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poverty
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line for that reason they choose NGOs.
Therefore
, those
organisations
helped them to overcome their present condition. By giving free health care, medicine or small scale
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loan. On the other side, some
people
always love to help others personally because they have trust issues
on
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charitable
organisations
because they are using donated
money
for their personal entertainment. For an illustration, a report shows that in Vietnam, most of
non profits
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organisations
are corrupted, they keep donated financial assistance in their pockets and spend so tiny amounts for
people
’s welfare.
Secondly
, individuals can help other
people
so promptly rather
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national
organisations
because they acknowledge
about
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people
problems and
also
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well informed about their needs. As well as he can personally know about his
money
can utilise his
money
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way or not. To conclude with, in my point of view, both are playing
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role to help needy
people
. It doesn’t matter what
from
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of is that individuals or national,
concern
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should be donated
money
should
be reach
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to the
people
.
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