Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #children

this

day and age, there is a common belief that

ads

aimed at

children

should not be allowed and

this

seems to be an increasingly common trend in many parts of the world. From my perspective, even though those

ads

can be good to a certain extent, I believe that they should be banned since they do more harm than good. On the one hand, advertising plays an integral role in the economy could be plausible to some degree.

In other words

, without advertisement, some companies will suffer from an economic depression, which is a driving force behind an employees’ cut.

Therefore

, the unemployment rate will be on the increase, which is a breeding ground for social chaos.

This

may act as a precursor to not only an increase in the wealth gap but

also

a financial burden on the government.

However

, advertising and marketing messages are inundating

children

and teens and significantly contributing to some of the biggest problems facing teens today.

On the other hand

, there is a direct connection between a society’s levels of exposure to advertising and the level of consumption. In fact,

children

may suffer from frequent exposure to advertisements that their idols endorse the products. Taking the underdeveloped country as a salient example, there is greater exposure to alcohol advertising, which give rise to an increase in drinking among underage youth. Another compelling factor is that advertisements tend to be unrealistic and give a false impression of how the

children

would be or what will happen when they buy the product.

In other words

, there are numerous products that can pose a threat to

children

although

they are advertised to be good for

children

Therefore

this

is a testament to a ban in the

ads

aimed at

children

. In conclusion, despite the fact that if there are no

ads

for

children

, the government can face social chaos, I believe that those

ads

should be banned.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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screen time
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childhood obesity
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health awareness
fitness programs
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