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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight.Some people say that price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #price #foods
It is commonly believed that
increasing
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 number of
people
 are becoming obese. It is considered by some that increasing the price of fat goods will solve
this
 issue. I agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
next
 few paragraphs.
First
 of all, inflation of fatty goods will prompt
the
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people
 to buy less. It is a well-known fact that
freequent
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frequent
 buyers of fat oriented food products will reduce their purchases
as a result
 of low purchasing power especially in metropolitan cities where
cost
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the cost
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 of living is already higher.
For instance
, in order to reduce the consumption of
beer
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 the government authorities inflate the price to reduce the sales of these goods. In short, individuals will be able to balance their weight by having less saturated and unsaturated foods.
Secondly
,
higher
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 fat content diet makes fat belly. Needless to say that many communities now struggle to control their fat intake due to
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habitual
habitually
habbitual
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the habbitual
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 eating of fried items especially the young minds and it does have a detrimental effect on their mind and body.
The junk
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Junk
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 foods
does
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 not
containt
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contain
 the essential nutrients required by the body and
is
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are
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 difficult to digest. To illustrate, burgers and cola drinks include
high
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a high
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level
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levels
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 of
caffine
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caffeine
 that have a grave implication on the body.
Therefore
, in order to lead a healthy life
people
 must stop eating the processed foods. In conclusion, fast food items make
people
 unhealthy and the estate should take stringent action to restrict the intake of
such
 food by masses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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