Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is hapenning. Dicuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Advances
in technology are increasing in rich
people
because they can afford to buy the latest model for these technologies that are available in the market and
its
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easy for them to upgrade from one way to another. While some poor
people
still manage to have these
advances
using
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abilities to save money and to work hard. In my opinion
advances
in technology is affecting all kinds of
people
even they are rich or poor just to belong in the community. Nowadays
people
are living with these
advances
for their work, study and even
people
who are staying at home
becaise
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because
it makes the life easier so
majority
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are hooked with
these technology
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. There is nothing wrong to have these but we should all know our limit and
to
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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