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Question: some movies are serious, designed to make the auidence think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movies do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples.

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Movies
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 have the power to make 
people
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 laugh, cry, or think. A group of 
people
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 like comedian 
movies
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 because they can forget their problems, 
however
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 other 
interest
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 in serious 
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. I prefer to watch both
kind
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 of 
movies
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 because there are some advantages and disadvantages of both 
type
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types
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 of 
movies
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.
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 of all, 
movies
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 and serials are one the most accessible media and we can use in our bedroom, cell phone, or other places; because of 
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 it can reflect in our real lives, emotions, failures, or personality. Mainly, 
movies
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 are designed to make you think and they are able to open your eyes 
about
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 some problems. For instance, if you watch 
a historical 
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historical movies
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movies
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 about a country, you can learn about 
the
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 culture, dresses, or 
the
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 habits 
of
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them
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.   On the other hand, I believe that
,
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 serious 
movies
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  can improve your communication. Usually, humans discuss more 
about
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 serious 
movies
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 than comedic  because they have many questions to  answer. In the 
second
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 place, after a long day outside of the home, a person 
need
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 a break. Amusing 
movies
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 make 
people
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 laugh. 
Besides
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, watching 
movies
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 or serials is one of the most popular 
entertain
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entertainment
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 in the world and 
people
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 prefer to watch a comedic movie with their friends or family and 
enjoy
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. In addition 
to
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, laughing makes one feel better and it is important for their soul. In conclusion,  I think that every movie must teach us to be kind, strong and grateful and
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 by watching 
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people
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 can get different messages and which might be a quite a nature.
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