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Some people say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work. Is hard work the key to success or is talent also important?

#people #success #percent #talent #work
When we talk about
success
, there are many opinions that have been expressed, some people claim that hard
work
 is a key to
success
 whereas others
are think
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 that
talent
 is the most important thing to
success
. But my notion of
this
 view
that
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is that both contribute to
success
. Here
i
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 will shed light on my reasons for
this
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view point
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viewpoint
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. One of the
manin
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main
 key lead to
success
 is hard
work
. Consistent give rise to
success
.
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A person
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Person
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 who always
succeed
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are
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 never give up. They don't mind how arduous the road to
success
 is, how many times they fall or do not give up until they reach their goal like when we have a competition, we
alway
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always
 practice until we win a medal.
On the other hand
, hard
work
 is not enough to lead to
success
, it
also
 takes
talent
 to lead to
success
 too like when we
stuck
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 in
bad
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 situation, we have to use our
talent
 and wisdom to get out
that
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 situation. Not only
talent
 but
also
 need others
such
 as opportunity, experience, skills, perseverance and not giving up to lead to
success
. From the above ideas, combine to make a
truth
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 key to achieve the goal that we dream of. In my point of view,
i
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 admit that
success
 is 90
percent
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per cent
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 and 10
percent
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per cent
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of
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talented.
Although
success
 could be due to hard
work
 and
talent
,
but
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many other factors maybe will help you to
success
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succeed
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.
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