Obesity is a serious problem in many countries especially in rich countries discuss ways to solve the problem provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Matters related to overweight have posed a great challenge in rich countries there are solutions to
this
problem as will be discussed in the essay. Obesity has caused serious threats to peoples health ranging from young people to the old why is
this
so, junk
food
has contributed to about 99
percent
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with it being readily available and affordable,during lunch breaks you will find a big number in fast foods
restuarants
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restaurants
unlike
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restuarants
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restaurants
that sell healthy balanced meals,the reason again goes back to the
individuals
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affordability balanced meals is expensive junk is cheap and fast
hence
the name fast
food
.
for
example
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on weekends most families will not prepare
food
but buy french fries and all manner of fast foods, even on picnics the trend is equally the same buying
food
and not only
food
but fast
food
has been considered cheap and trendy.
However
obesity is a disease just like any other disease that can be cured and prevented,the community need to understand the side effects that come along with excessive body weight ,
diseases
like hypertension,diabetes among others are risk factors and
this
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diseases
will
also
come with other complications,the community should adapt to ways of better and healthy living to prevent
this
lifestyle
diseases
that are a threat to our workforce and health,
for instance
just like the government carries out immunization campaigns health awareness
campigns
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campaigns
should be a requirement ,matters on diet emphasised too,our children taught to eat healthy and balanced diets at all times In
conclusion
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most people considered" FAT PEOPLE" as wealthy and are
definetly
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definitely
living a good life, but keep in mind
this
is just a myth it holds no facts to it.So it is easy to control obesity than any other lifestyle
diseases
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disease
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that accompany too much weight.
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