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Economic progress is often used to measure a country’s success. However, some people believe that other factors are more important. What other factors should also be considered when measuring a country’s success? Which one do you think is the most important?

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Economic development is one of the factors that determines the success of a nation.
However
, there are other factors that can define whether or not a
country
 is successful. Personally, I agree that economic progress is one factor in measuring the accomplishment of a
country
 and
health
 and
education
 degrees are true as other causes of national achievement. Despite economic value,
health
 status
also
 contributes to measurement to decide the achievement of a
country
. The healthier the citizens, the more productive they are in doing their activities.
As a result
, they can fulfil their rudimentary needs well since they have the fitness to work and earn money.
This
 condition
also
 enables a
country
 to spend less money in eradicating an outbreak or epidemic and contribute more money to social development,
for instance
, establishing more public infrastructures and developing entrepreneurship to help to cope with unemployment. Another measure for national prosperity is
education
. In many developed countries, people who attain and can secure better jobs are those who have a higher level of
education
.
Education
 can affect people’s ability to compete and maintain their job and wages. If individuals can secure their job, they will not be worried about being unemployed. In my opinion,
education
 is the most important factor.
For example
, Brunei is Asia's number one GDP per capita, with petroleum raw materials but their people are very poor and very poor because they don't have a good
education
. They only work hard even for 10 years old kids without investing in
education
.
Besides
, Singapore and Japan are two of the best countries to have a perfect
education
. Singapore has a world-leading
education
 system and has many young talents. After all, they focus on how to educate a person rather than invest too much in the economy or
health
 because the
country
's development or not depends on the people themselves. In conclusion, economic,
education
, and
health
 status are important to create a successful
country
 and these elements have balanced roles for pointing welfare to a nation
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