Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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increase in
people
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inhabitable and hostile
places
.A chunk of
individuals
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visit these
places
in search of unique experience whilst others are sceptical about it.There are both advantages and disadvantages to
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will discuss both in
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reason for
individuals
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a mobile
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places
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that helps them to boost their confidence. After the completion of
difficult
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journey, the exhilaration cannot describe in more words. It
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to test one’s limit.
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like Columbus, sale around the world to discover and connect Unkown lands.
Moreover
, tourism is growing leaps and bounds that
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to boost the economy of the particular country.
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the more tourist arriving in the country
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therefore
more jobs opportunities created for
people
as consequences the countries economy grow many folds.
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to take unprecedented risks sometimes turn into
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dangerous situation. While completing
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journey, many
individuals
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injury
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that made them immobile for their whole life.
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, there are hundreds of
individuals
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Mount Everest while climbing and died.
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, there is already
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of essential resources
such
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remote areas.
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, many
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visiting turn
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worse. To conclude, in my opinion,
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effect of visiting dangerous
places
outweigh the negative
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as it will not only boost individual confidence but
also
brings prosperity to
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country.
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  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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