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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious one and suggest ways to tackle this problem.

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. Answer: overpopulation is a global threat and has always been a challenge in
progress
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the progress
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 of a country. Even urbanization in which people migrate from village to city is quite debatable
as well as
 controversial. It is
negative
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a negative
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 development which causes
imbalance
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an imbalance
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 in
population
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the population
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. There
are
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myriad
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 of reasons which can be discussed as problematic issues in relation to urbanization. The first and foremost is,
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 causes
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a
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shortage of resources as overpopulation creates
imbalance
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an imbalance
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 in available resources. Shortage of land, water, traffic jams and pollution all are related
with
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over-population
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overpopulation
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 in urban
areas
. Unemployment and poverty
has
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 increased
due to
 over-population. Explaining
further
, it is very important to have a solution towards
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imbalance of
growing
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the growing
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 population. Rural
area
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areas
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 should be equally developed. Facilities like education,
hospital
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hospitals
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 and transport should be available in rural
areas
 so that people do not migrate and cause problems in urban
areas
. To recapitulate, the progress of
country
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the country
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 develops when rural
areas
 provide enough opportunities and facilities to the people.
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,
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they feel comfortable living in rural
areas
. Villages should be
well- connected
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well-connected
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 with cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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