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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Language
 is a vital means of communication, to understand and to relate to each other.It is a way to express our
emotion
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 and connect to one other. But it differs from each country and varies from
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one places
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places
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 to another. In my opinion, it is an advantage
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 known to
different
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language
. People nowadays are love to travel, they are learning how to speak in order for them to be understood and to be treated as they want. It is easy to blend in
to
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the
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society if we can talk the same
language
 that they are having. It helps us
also
 to relate
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 their beliefs which is
also
 a part of learning for us. Workers abroad intend to learn
there
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language
 to
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. It is a part of them to adapt
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 a foreign world to understand and to make their life easier. The disadvantage
in
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 the other hand is
lack
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 of education and
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 in learning these languages because it will take time and patience to learn their native tongue.
This days
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, because of the different means of communication they are forgetting
on
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how to speak properly and
instead
 they are using different kinds of
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 to talk to each other, some are having
there
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 own words. With that, they are forgetting how to speak
elloquently
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eloquently
 and just contented on what they know. In conclusion, it depends on how people to be confident on how they can express themselves and connect to people comfortably.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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