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Living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

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Today many
people
 are finding difficulties in communicating foreign dialects because of the fluency of particular countries
language
 and different cultures.
However
,
this
 can impart an
impact
 on the social and emotional
problems
 of a particular country. In
this
 essay,
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 will explore the different arguments and provide a detailed analysis of the difficult situations that are facing in designated areas.
people
 who arrived from a different country as an immigrant, have many
problems
 that are connected with the culture,
language
 and region.
For instance
,citizens who are arriving as an immigrant to the united states have a serious problem obstacle in the initial stage to speak up.
However
,
this
 can be a cause serious
problems
 in terms of social relationships with each other.
Secondly
,
people
 who don't have fluency in languages
such
 as,English,Spanish and French have less scope in finding jobs in other states because of a lack of knowledge and experience.
For example
,countries
such
 as Canada,Europe and unites states are inviting
people
 from different multicultural who can speak English and other languages with fluency in communication.
Moreover
,
this
 can
impact
 getting jobs because of
language
 barriers.
Finally
,
this
 negative
impact
 of communication barriers can cause some
problems
 in relationships with friends and relatives because of the unknown
language
 or new to the society. Despite social
problems
 they have some drawbacks
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 when it went with practicality,
people
 face many
problems
 in reading skills because of the
second
 vocabulary
such
 as
,
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reading a label when they go shopping with friends and family.
Secondly
, writing and speaking skills are essential in getting good jobs
otherwise
 it can
impact
 emotionally
people
 because of the problem of unemployment.
Furthermore
,gaps between two different cultures occur because of the barriers in communicating with each other.
However
,learning a foreign
language
 is easy these days because of different books of comics and novels that are available online resources. In conclusion,leaving home country and landing foreign places can have a negative
impact
 on personal and professional life.
However
,
this
 can be avoided by learning different dialects as it has been made easier because of online learning style materials.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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