Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people claim that it is more pleasurable and comfortable to watch a

live

event

While

I tend to agree with that idea, I would say that to be a part of one of those events is the best experience in one’s life. On the one hand, many reasons follow the idea that watching a

live

broadcast

event

is more enjoyable. There are many people

said

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who said

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that it is very annoying to book

tickets

to the

event

and they have to spend much time driving to where the

event

is held.

Also

, the cost of staying at home and watching the

event

with some snacks

are

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far cheaper than the cost of buying

tickets

and driving to the

event

’s site. And the snack’s price is

also

higher than those in a grocery store.

For instance

, the

Olympics

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Olympic

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Games is an international sports

event

that takes place every four years, and each time it occurs in a country that the host picked.

Therefore

, to attend on

this

occasion, we have to spend a lot of dollars on booking

tickets

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for

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the games and

also

plane

tickets

if it is too far from your country.

On the other hand

, the one who finds watching a

live

performance on

more exciting

maybe

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may

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lack of sense of participation. The first point is that the atmosphere at the stadium is very exciting and amusing, much more than the atmosphere when we

watching

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watch

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at home. At home, we cannot feel happiness or sadness directly with hundreds of people surrounding us. The second point is that enjoying a

live

performance is not just to watch a play or a match but is to participate in a crowd and

feeling

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feel

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the emotions of a thrilled throng.

For example

, when watching a football match at a stadium, we could share the happiness with the next-sit friends with a goal. In conclusion,

while

it is comfortable and convenient when

watching

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watch

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live

performance on

, we cannot deny many feelings that watching directly brings us.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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immersive experience
replicated
energy
atmosphere
sense of community
shared excitement
unforgettable
predictable
convenience
comfort
crowds
travel
multiple camera angles
close-ups
replays
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