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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their car?

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Considering a couple of years ago,
people
 are getting
use
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 to
use
 their own
car
 more and more rather than using the public transportation.
Therefore
,
public
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 are experienced one dramatic increase in
traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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jams
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. I truly agree with
this
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these
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 statements and in
this
 essay, I aim to elaborate
its
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 causes and present few measures
which
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that
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 government can carry out.
First
 of all, I believe that
car
 ownership
create
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 a huge
traffic
jam
, while there are other reasons which cannot be ignored.
In other words
, one of the genesis problems would be inadequate public transportation. When buses, taxis and other public vehicles are suitable for
population
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,
people
 prefer to utilize their own
car
.
For instance
, public vehicles always cannot be on time and time is extremely important for
people
.
Besides
, they are not usually empty or
quite
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, many times they are crowded and pretty noisy.
Secondly
, what aggravates the problems of
traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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jams
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 is
unnecessary
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an unnecessary
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use
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to use
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 of
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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. To simplify the matter, many
rater
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raters
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 using their own transportation in a short destination, which it might cause from their laziness or their tiredness.
For example
,
people
 prefer to drive for buying their needs
instead
 of walking or biking, even if the shop be close to them. One solution for the government would be
raise
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the
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apply
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public awareness about the consequences of
the
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traffic
. To clarify, when
people
 know how using too much unnecessary
use
 of
car
 causes the
traffic
 and other environmental problems, they try to schedule it.
Moreover
, the state could expand the usage of biking and
stablish
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establish
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 path for it. In conclusion, according to the above-mentioned facts,
traffic
jam
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jams
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 can be controlled by
the
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apply
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public awareness and establishing places for renting some bicycles.
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