Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Handful
people
consider that children who have received secondary school
education must spend some time on travelling or job, instead
of getting higher education. This
essay will discuss the benefits of travelling or working after high school
and disadvantages
of Correct article usage
the disadvantages
this
choice.
The main advantages
of travelling or working after Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
school
is
that graduates become more confident and experienced. Change the verb form
are
In other words
, when young people
start having a job, they can rely only on themselves, and this
makes them more independent. For example
, youth people
are used to depend
on Change the verb form
depending
parents
financially; Correct pronoun usage
their parents
however
, when they start getting own
income they can manage their Correct pronoun usage
their own
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lives
life
life's
lifes
as they want.
Correct your spelling
lives
On the other hand
, the most significant drawback is that school
graduates Replace the word
lose
loose
their time Correct your spelling
lose
on
doing nothing. Change preposition
apply
This
means that not all youth can organize themselve
and find good Correct your spelling
themselves
occupation
after Fix the agreement mistake
occupations
school
. A classic example is when kids are grown up in family
where all decisions are made by parents; Add an article
a family
hence
, it is psychologically difficult for 17 years old children take
responsibility for their Fix the infinitive
to take
Correct your spelling
lives
life
lifes
. Correct your spelling
lives
For instance
, young pople
often change their occupations, and they give up when facing any difficulties. As the result, Correct your spelling
people
in
Change preposition
at
age
of 20 years Add an article
the age
an age
old
they still do not have long work experience.
In conclusion, having brake after Add a comma
,old
school
graduation in order to travel or work gives some benefits for youth, although
there are some disadvantages. In spite of the fact that young people
can have experience and independence, for some graduates
it could not be an option because of their personality.Add a comma
,graduates
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