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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. · What do you think the causes are? · What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
These days many people keep pets as companions and
this
 becomes a new lifestyle. In terms of pros, keeping pets plays an important role in filling the sense of loneliness of people. And
also
, they protect the owner as well as the property. Cats and dogs,
for instance
, are
one
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some
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 of those animals that help fight depression and entertain their owners.
However
, animals are the source of some diseases and their medical treatment cost a lot. Some pets need special attention and time
for example
 they should walk them three times a day.
In addition
, dogs are sometimes reported as
disturbance
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having disturbance
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 during the night by barking and biting. In my opinion, having a pet is beneficial in dealing with
stresses
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 and dealing with modern life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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