Some people believe that workers have worked in a company for long years should be promoted. What is your opinion.

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society so
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promotion plays
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role in it. A section of society asserts that the employees
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length
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of service
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more should be eligible for
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scale.I endorse
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ideology and the reasons to support
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will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs with my opinion.
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with, human resource is
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of the organisation. The old employees are more used to the workplace culture. Their exposure
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productivity but
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of the firm. A survey conducted by the world employee organization revealed that
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five leading companies
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the market are retaining
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existing staff which is the major reason behind their success. Apart from
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, if senior apprentices are selected for
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scale.
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will increase their loyalty and sense of belongingness which resulting in better decision making by promotes. Moving
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, hiring employees within the organisation can help to cut the cost of recruitment as well as
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of training.As appointing new staff need grooming which
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major
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portion of revenue.
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companies
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are appointing from
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are going through
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at earlier stages due to the heavy cost burden.
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, youth is more updated with the latest technology and what is happening around the world.
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, a person who devotes major time
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thriving
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of
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is definitely requires
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appreciation and award in the shape of promotion. To conclude, it can be
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task of ignoring young talents but overall it is favourable development in the terms of productivity and profitability.
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the sagacious
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approach to retain old workers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • long-term loyalty
  • deep understanding
  • invaluable qualities
  • higher-level positions
  • leadership skills
  • decision-making
  • mentor
  • boost morale
  • turnover rates
  • performance and competence
  • tenure
  • fresh perspectives
  • innovation
  • balanced approach
  • merit-based
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