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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

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In recent years, a significant number of the
population
 has migrated towards
cities
 that create many daily life issues. In the course of the essay, I will describe the issues faced by locals and explain the steps that should need to do it by authorities.
To begin
 with, that our
cities
 are planned many years ago according to that
population
 which native of that area.
However
, the number of
people
 is increasing in
cities
 to get facilities.
This
 massive number of
people
 caused many problems like traffic pollution and food security.
For example
, a city in Pakistan is designed for a five million
population
, but currently, 20 million
people
 live there, due to these extra
people
 that increased load on the city's rode, which damages early and enormous new vehicles that caused air pollution. If it disconnects from the rest of the country,
then
 locals of
this
 city will face a shortage of food.
In addition
, water and sewerage is a crucial issue which causes many diseases. To solve these problems, governments need to develop towns on the other side of the country. advanced education and respectable jobs are available in the main
cities
although
 these facilities and opportunities are not in small and new towns. governments should ensure these things in that areas which basic right of the citizen. To improve the rate of migration, they should provide some financial assistance that supports the initial cost of bills. In the conclusion, the massive
population
 of the
cities
 caused many problems which make the huge crisis
although
 governments need to make the plane to move
people
 in other areas
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