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Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#students #focus #attention #school
Nowadays education system has been developed from a few yesteryears due to technological development in the education system. Same have been made positive and negative impacts on
scholar
 learning. Due to
this
 students are facing issues with their classroom attention. As well , low involvement in teaching
also
 impacting the
scholar
 understanding.
Firstly
, mobile contact
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 a significant issue for these problems. Resent of times almost all students have mobile contact.
Moreover
, present Co-vide lockdowns have created a path to get the phones for all
junior
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 if they
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 required or not. Because of online classes. Though, a maximum of children is using that phones for unwanted things like playing games, watching movies and
such
 waste things. If
scholar
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 started to focus on mobile phones,
that is
 high enough thing to lose their focus on classroom attention. The teachers only can solve these issues instantly. The way of approach and teaching would make the path for
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pupil
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 to be focused.
For instance
, in my 10th ,standard I and my complete
class
 people have paid more attention to mathematics
class
 because of my teacher, which
class
 was always bored for
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another class pupil
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class
 pupil. Because of my teacher that involvement has been coming for our complete
class
. He always share his real-life examples to communicate the syllabus to us which helped us for a better understanding of problematic theories. In conclusion, whatever the technology come and go, teachers approach will always stay with
scholar
,
that is
 the only thing that can make way to create focus to
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 on their classes.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distractions
  • focus
  • pay attention
  • lack of interest
  • motivation
  • fatigue
  • sleep
  • classroom environment
  • teaching methods
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • workload
  • support
  • active learning strategies
  • engaging
  • student-centered teaching
  • realistic goals
  • rewards
  • balanced lifestyle
  • screen time
  • breaks
  • physical activity
  • support and guidance
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