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The death penalty is the best way to control and prevent serious crimes. To what extend do you agree?

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It is commonly believed that criminals must be given
death
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a death
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 sentence in order to stop grave criminal activities. I agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
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 few paragraphs.
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 with, death punishment will make people discipline in their life. It is a well-known fact that communities indulging in minor crimes in urban and rural areas will live in the fear in the eyes of law and would give up their bad
habbits
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habits
 of petty crimes.
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 the development of
this
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 kind of fear depends on person to person it would certainly make
the
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apply
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society
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crime free
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crime-free
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 after a period of time.
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, hands are chopped off if a person is found to be guilty in the court of law in many nations. In short, stringent criminal laws are essential to make the country safer to live
.
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, economic progress is faster in countries if there is no
crime
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 in the
environmnet
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environment
. Undoubtedly, many economies around the world have become
super power
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superpower
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 recently in the modern era because of
lack
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the lack
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 of
anti social
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anti-social
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 activities. To
illustarte
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illustrate
, Japan has achieved the highest literacy rate in the world because of strict laws pertaining to
crime
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.
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, economic progression is only possible when there are no criminal elements in the nation. In conclusion, I strongly affirm that an ideal way to prevent
crime
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 in the country is by implementing
the
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apply
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extreme
anti criminal
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anti-criminal
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 rules and the development of
nation
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a nation
the nation
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 is largely
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 by its
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crime free
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crime-free
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 society.

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