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Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that
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tourism
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 industry is a major resource for
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 economy.
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, some people think that
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 industry can cause
negative
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 impact on local cultures and
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the country’s
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 environment. I highly disagree with the
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 industry helps to popularize traditions, cultural attractions and contributes to the preservation of
cultural
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the cultural
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 heritage of a country.
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, nowadays national and local museums are more visited by tourists.
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, If
great
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 amount of
travelers
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 didn’t visit
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 of cultural attractions, they would be bankrupts. It means that the more cultural destinations are closed, the more local cultures are damaged.
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 Georgia has a great cultural heritage like local villages where they make traditional home wine and national dishes and their main living source is tourist’s money.
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,
tourism
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 can help to evolve local areas and bring a new life to the
long forgotten
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 cultural
centers
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.
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, it is a
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 fact that if not
travelers
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, who are highly interested in different cultural destinations like local villages, those rural places would be emptied because of the lack of money.
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, it is a stereotype that tourists usually leave a lot of garbage behind. The research has shown that citizens are
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 reason for polluted local areas and tourists are more careful about the cultural heritage of other countries. In conclusion,
tourism
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 plays a vital role in
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regional development and helps to keep alive a lot of cultural destinations.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural dilution
  • Environmental degradation
  • Responsible tourism
  • Ecotourism
  • Cultural conservation
  • Habitat destruction
  • Sustainable practices
  • Cultural exchange
  • Commercialization of cultural sites
  • Cultural heritage
  • Local ecosystems
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