Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extend do you agree, use reasons and specific example to answer?

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of a Child’s creativity and skills lies
initially
with the parent as well as
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area of responsibility. At a young age is when they can be
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and exposed to the various opportunities
life
presents to the youngster when he faces the challenges in
life
. I partially agree
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both
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views and believe that
both
play a huge role in the development of the child with a few examples to elucidate my view. An enjoyable activity as
such
maybe not
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by the pupil as his mentors. He should be able to explore all available options at
both
home and school, these
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maybe
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educational or extra cultural activities.
For example
, an introduction to music or an instrument
such
as
keyboard
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or a guitar can develop a young mind in cognitive thinking. creativity and faster decision making.
Although
these should be explored by the pupil and his teacher/parent together and not forced into learning. He/she should be allowed to drop
this
if he does not find it enjoyable. Reading is an activity that develops the
kids
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imaginative
mind
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minds
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and
explore
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the world through the eyes of the Author.
This
greatly improves
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vocabulary as well as helps him in
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decisions
although
someone who is only focused
in
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reading will miss out on a plethora of Opportunities
such
as Sports, Music, Dancing, Debates and other things
life
has to offer to the young pupil and
this
maybe
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a decision he may regret in the future as he couldn’t try these at a younger stage and it will turn out to be late to start in
life
. A lot of reading may focus the kid to become more of an Introvert than an Extrovert. I strongly conclude that the
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child
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should be exposed to
both
reading and other enjoyable activities and not following the former more than the latter or vice versa. Too much of anything can be harmful and
hence
both
must be introduced to the child as per the kid’s mind and desire to Explore.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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