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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #creativity
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child
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 growth and development will be based on
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how
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childhood is spent.
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 some might say that, doing an
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 activity will lead the
child
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 to develop their
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 and creativity rather
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than reading
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. In my opinion, both plays
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 role in the
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all-around
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 development of the
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, reading improves the
child
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’s cognitive
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.
This
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 is a really important factor because, reading paves a way for the
child
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 to understand the language more clearly so that, they can use it properly once they at a stage of teenage.
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, we can see a future journalist or
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 famous author, once they have a good handle
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 the language they prefer. If a
child
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 is not encouraged to read, it will be really difficult for
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the future
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, as we know the major part of schooling involves reading. So, I prefer
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practising
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 reading will ripe benefits.
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, conducting enjoyable
activites
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activities
such
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 as playing soccer, drawing will
also
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 improve the
child
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skills
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 and ability to create.
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child
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the child
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 a happy,
rewires
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 their brain to be social and helps them to be one step ahead of the activity.
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, they may help the parents to set up the ground for playing soccer
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 or pick up the necessary
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’ for their drawing.
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, these
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 and creativeness will
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help to become more socially accepted in
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society. In conclusion, reading helps a
child
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 develop the
skills
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 to learn the language
as well as the doing an enjoyable activity
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, as well as the doing an enjoyable activity,
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 improves their social and creative
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 equally.
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