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Children weight are increasing over the years. What are the reasons? What can be done?

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It is true that an increasing number of kids are getting overweight these years. There are various reasons leading to
this
 problem but steps can definitely be taken to tackle it. Several factors result in youth's obesity.
Firstly
, children are having more and more academic work than that in the past,
casuing
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causing
 they could only spend less time doing sports.
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, I remembered when I was a child in elementary school I lost the balance between work and sport and spent much more time sitting in front of the desk to finish my overload homework so that I was
easily
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to
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get fat.
Secondly
, parents care so much about
nurtrition
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nutrition
 that children may sometimes take in them more than they should have. They hope their kids could be stronger and taller and the useful way to
it
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 is to make their little ones eat
serveral
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several
 kinds of
nurtrition
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nutrition
nutritional
 products.
Finally
, intense exposure to junk food may
also
 be an aspect as too much fat and unhealthy oil contained in junk food, doing harm to adolescent's body. In my opinion, many measures can be taken to address the issue. The government should call for
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school
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 to have more sports and after-school activities for students. It could even be added
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 school rules or regulations.
Furthermore
, doctors and physicians should promote the right way of youth's healthcare by giving parents lectures, instructions or guidebooks related to the
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relevant
 topics.
Last
 but not the least, parents need
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 their kids' pocket money and teach them to stay away from unhealthy food. In conclusion, there are many methods
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 the situation and
adolescent
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adolescents
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 are likely to be away from
obesity
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the obesity
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 problem.
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