Some people say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People travel to understand
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culture which exists in different parts of the world and the easiest way to experience them is through the tourist attractions in that place. There is a heated discussion on whether
such
tourism
projects are conserving or degrading the traditions of a place.
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insight into the pros and cons
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latter discussion is required to arrive at a proper conclusion. The advantages of showcasing native attractions aimed at
tourist
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are to be discussed
first
. When the artform or
crafts
of a country is displayed in front of a
foriegn
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foreign
foreigner
and native crowd, the art and
crafts
are preserved and carried on to the
next
generation
nevertheless
, it can even spur interest in
atleast
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at least
some of the viewers to
further
study about that craft.
Although
preserving the art is important, it is equally important to support the artist, the money the artist receives from performing is
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great support.
For instance
, people from all over the world travel to India to experience
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cutural
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cultural
diversity, there is a huge amount of population working in the
tourism
sector and
crafts
from coir, bamboo, clay etc are mainly focusing on a
foriegn
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foreign
customer.
Kadhakali
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Kathakali
,
Kadhak
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Kathak
, are old dance forms
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are still performed only because there is demand for them in
tourism
sectors.
Although
, there are many advantages they are often diminished due to the commercialisation of
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sector, which adversely affect the cultural history of a place. Hotels and holiday companies often charge hefty fees from tourists but the service provided would be cheap and products sold
are often fakes
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. The people who perform are often inexperienced and are not having any background in that field,
as a
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the original tradition is modified and its value is degraded.
For example
,
Kadhakali
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Kathakali
a dance form which used to happen overnight is now being performed for just 5 minutes, similar is the case for ayurvedic treatments which lasted for months now is done in a day, even worst is the market for
counterfiet
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counterfeit
crafts
which deals from simple coir products to crystals. In conclusion, looking at the advantages and disadvantages, I believe that converting traditional values into
tourism
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opportunity for the natives and will help in preserving the culture,
however
strict monitoring is required from the authority to make sure that the cultural essence is not lost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Dilution of cultural traditions
  • Authenticity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Revenue
  • Financial support
  • Preservation
  • Promotion
  • Commodification of culture
  • Intrinsic value
  • Exposure
  • Global awareness
  • Respect and understanding
  • Economic gain
  • Local communities
  • Decision-making processes
  • Respectful portrayal
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