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Some believe that people should make efforts to flight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Apparently, there are many natural disasters happening around the
world
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 as
consequence
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 of
climate
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change
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. Some
people
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 suggest that global warming should be combated, whereas others think
people
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 should accept the current fact and adapt to changes. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. Many activists around the
world
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 try to urge
people
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 to stop behaviours that cause the greenhouse effect. Many
people
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 contribute to
find
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 strategies to mitigate
climate
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change
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;
however
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,
this
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 is unable to be successful without governments’ support ;
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, governments need to deliver effective
climate
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 policies
such
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 as carbon footprint reduction, clean energy, sustainable lifestyle and so on to all organisations, factories and individuals to be able to follow them in order to prevent the increase of the worse situations.
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, some
people
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 think that
climate
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change
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 is acceptable and
people
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 should be adaptable to all kinds of situations. In the
last
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 few decades, there were different natural disasters happened in different parts of the
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such
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 as floods, sea-level rise, the melting of the polar ice sheet, droughts, extreme weather and earthquake which are the effects of global warming that cannot be avoided to encounter in some countries.
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, Japan is a
countries
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 that earthquakes occur the most,
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, Japanese
people
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 still live in their country and learn how to live with it.
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, their houses and buildings have been built with resilient structures to withstand earthquakes. In conclusion,
people
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 should be adaptable to unexpected natural disasters, in a meantime,
climate
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change
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 cannot be ignored and allowed to get worse in the future by human behaviours. Both government and individuals should take actions to tackle
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 problem and mitigate carbon emissions to order to make our
world
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 the best place to live.
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