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News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in a newspaper. What factors do you think influence their decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news were reported?

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Nowadays, there are several channels to get
news
,
such
 as the radio, TV, newspapers and the
Internet
. I think the
Internet
 is the best among these. In my essay, I am going to explain why. Since its invention, the
Internet
 has been booming as a prospective industry. Not only because it is a combination of text, audio and video, but
also
 due to its
convinience
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convenience
. It has threatened the domination of spreading
news
 of the traditional media, and, I would say, is about to take control.We can find everything we want on the
Internet
 – the latest
news
, books, songs, movies, cartoons… whatever. With the radio, we can merely hear. Compared to a newspaper, the radio and TV can provide the latest information.
For
instance
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 the breaking
news
 of the Americans’ attacking Iraq was immediately
availalbe
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available
 online, as well as that the Twin Towers of New York were destroyed on September 11, 2001.
However
, we just cannot carry TV 24/7. The
Internet
 is a
convinient
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convenient
 way of getting information, as long as your mobile phone is connected or you possess a laptop. When I am
on
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in
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 a vehicle, I usually have my cellphone connected to the
Internet
,
then
 browse through
whathappend
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what happened
what happens
 in the past few hours, or log in
MSN
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to begin
 a conversation with my friends. Reading a newspaper is
also
 a good way to kill time, but for me, a youngster, it is not so modern as “surfing online while commuting”. The traditional media will never disappear, though the
Internet
 has taken a big advantage in the competition. And definitely, there is still a long way for the
Internet
 to go. Anyway, the
Internet
 benefits me the most, and I highly appreciate it.
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