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We have entered a throw-away society and fill the environment with rubbish. What are the causes and what are your solutions?

#society #environment #rubbish
We are currently in the age of total consumption which is
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resulting
 in spreading
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 of rubbish all over the land and oceans. Diversity of approaches towards the Earth's state and distinct lack of recycling factories that surely cause the problem
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 a good foundation to cope with the global waste difficulties. It is true that
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 over
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 the amount of the environmental challenges drastically increased and brought
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. We can certainly blame someone,
however
, it might be a good option to emphasize
such
 causes as
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 diversity of opinions on dealing methods with it and ,equally important, endemic shortage of points that can empty and recycle huge tons of junk that fills the landfills.
Firstly
, if the one was asked about how to resolve
this
 complication, we probably would get a typical answer or indifferent silence in response.
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, the lion's share of the population simply is not ready to have something to do with it, assuming themselves somewhere out of the global situation.
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, even though there are
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amount
 of
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opportunities
 to call a halt to
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 issue, we experience
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 of
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centers
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 all over the world, even in the countries of the 1st word. Proper ways to deal with it would be
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proper marketing targetting on changing and shaping public's mind in
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 way by conclusive advertisements and
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collaborations
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 with strong public role models.
This
 way, there would be high chances to get involved more and more people in order to solve the issue. Another proposal is to increase
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 and efficiency of
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 places.
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 high percentages of recycled rubbish
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 not only contribute to
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 in nature, but it
also
 can prevent natural resources from depletion. To conclude with, having some groups indifferent towards junk spread and inadequate forces to clean all up can be solved by acts of television and public figures as well as increases in
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 points.
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