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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and your opinion.

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Many governments consider economic growth as their most important goal while some people think there are other kinds of
progress
 that are as important for a
country
. While there are some factors like education and culture, have minor influences on the
progress
 of a
country
, I believe the financial situation would still be the most influential on the development of a
country
. For some people, education plays an equally important role as money.
In other words
, an educated population could help their
country
 grow by developing knowledge in many aspects and
consequently
 raise the awareness of every individual which is considered to be a development. In a similar manner, cultural growth would significantly affect the quality of people's lives.
For example
, Developing the culture of a
country
 would help its inhabitants save their natural environment and
therefore
, enhance their quality of life lived in that environment.
Although
 those aspects are considered to have the same importance, a prosperous life would only be possible if the financial levels in the economy rise. Monetary conditions can affect other growth aspects quite dramatically.
For instance
, in an underdeveloped
country
that is
 considered poor in the economy, culture doesn't seem very effective and educational efforts to bring about awareness wouldn’t help the development of the
country
 as much. In conclusion, while there are other types of
progress
which
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 can have an influence on a
country
 to some extent, it is only the role of the economy that would cause major
progress
 in that
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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