Some people think that getting old is a negative thing, whereas others think it is much easier for people to live in modern society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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On one hand, senior
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undergo various changes within their body and these changes may contribute to a cognitive decline.
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, The body undergoes various physical and metabolic changes over the decades and
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leads to many neurological
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like Alzheimer's, Parkinson's, Dementia. The elderly who may be burdened by
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diseases
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find it difficult to lead a normal life.
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, in a statistical survey by
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Geriatric
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the number of
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elderly
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missing in the
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few years have increased dramatically. The impact of missing elderly persons sometimes leads to mental health issues for other family members and
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may lead to disruption among the family structure.
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, there are other musculoskeletal
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like arthritis which may lead to difficulty in movement and would require constant supervision from a family member.
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, a few
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regard seniority as a burden on their families.
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, due to faster recovery time and with the advent of home care facilities it is now possible to treat many
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at home with the help of teleconsultations. A lot of elderly
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are now embracing technology and are using it to make their lifestyle easier. To cite an example few researchers at Harvard University have come up with a self-driving wheelchair that can navigate in any terrain and can help in easy movement of
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suffering from Arthritis.
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, Virtual reality is now being used in certain geriatric hospitals in the UK to help combat the feeling of loneliness among the elderly. Thereby, technology can be used to improve the quality of life of the elderly. In conclusion, despite few arguments on the ageing population being a burden with the availability of revolutionary technology at their fingertips it is easier than ever to lead a life as a senior citizen.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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