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There are 2 lifestyles: introverted and extroverted. Discuss about both lifestyles and give your opinion.

#lifestyles
The topic talks about extroverts and introverts In life, we could see many lifestyles and each person have
own
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 their different
lifestyle
. But in general, we can divide it into two main lifestyles are live introverted and live extroverted.
First
, living introverted is a term
use
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 to describe the person who has just want to live in
peace
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 place, they have no interest in loud and stressful things. And after
all
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 they just want to be alone. Maybe
this
 kind of
people
 seemed boring and solitary but it's not quite like that. Living introverted
also
 has its benefits. The
people
 having an introverted
lifestyle
,
they
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have a coherent way of thinking and a high ability
of
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 focus on their work They have the ability to observe sensitively, delicately and dependently.
Second
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 it's about an extroverted
lifestyle
, it's the opposite way of living introverts.
People
 living like
this
 way are very interested in excitement, love to communicate and hang out with
people
, that the reason why the introverts always bring positive energy to
people
, they know how to be attractive and have many relationships.
Beside
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 those advantages, extroverts are
also
 extremely susceptible to being influenced by others and sometimes losing themselves In conclusion, a
lifestyle
 is the choice of each person, but it is best to harmoniously combine it to make life more meaningful
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