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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages ?

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The
driverless
vehicles
 will
be broaden
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every
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where
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 in
next
 century. The only passengers of
this
 transportation mode will be left inside, not the driver.
This
 essay argues that the advantages of
driverless
vehicles
 outweigh the disadvantages.
This
 automobile's invention could
reduces
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 the huge amount of cost
that
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spent on production.
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 days
car
 industries are not making lots of money
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 used to. Many new technologies in the production lines are taking place human's work include the driver position.
For example
, Tesla is the prime investor who
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 improved their
driverless
 mode and put it on the market. They use AI to learn the context of the road so the
car
's autopilot system could escape from any obstruct item by itself.
This
 is a phenomenon impact that
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 the customers.
Moreover
, the greater benefit from
this
 technology is disabled people are able to drive a
car
 themselves without
helper
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.
This
 is increasing self-assured among these
disability
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 people community. As a highlight in a study, the data shows the lower case's number of patients who is lack of ability to do a daily basis was diagnose with
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a metal
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metal
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 illness which is a result from feeling isolated out of the society. On the downside, we all accept that Al is a "still" learning machine that
need
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 a lot more conditions and cased which have to input by a human. It is not reliable
some times
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.
The road
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 accidents could happen if the manufacture removes all of the manual system control.
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, the news shows an
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 of
small
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a small
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car
 crashed which is an effect
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 using
self parking
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 in proper parking space inside a local mall in
USA
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. In conclusion, The coming of
driverless
vehicles
provide
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 many positive consequences and the flaw in
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advanced technology might affect a negative outcome. But the advantages of
driverless
vehicles
 still outweigh the disadvantages as mentioned.
However
, The safety of passengers should be a major concern of any travel mode.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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