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The graph illustrates details about changes in the
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 and
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 rates in New Zealand in the
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 of 200 years . It's clear that at the beginning of the
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death
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rate
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 outweigh the
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rate
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 and both axes start to grow until 2041 after that they reach the same point,
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 50 years , the
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 has a marked decline so at the end of the
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 we can see there are more deaths than births. There was a magnificent rose in
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, the
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rate
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 had a steady growth Between 1921 and 1961
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 20 years
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 has experienced a
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 of volatility but
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 estimate had a different path and keep rising till reaching the same point off
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 estimate in 2041. Overall, these opposing trends mean that the
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 overtake the
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 around 2041 and there is a large gap between the two levels in 2101.
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